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Feb 28

Is it possible to fall out of love? Cause if you can fall in love... I suppose...
I suppose you could fall out of it. I'm scared.
I thought love was when you become intertwined, together... one.
Forever... forever is what everyone thinks. Is it even real?
I think she's starting to fall out of love.
I don't know
I'm trying... but we're drifting apart.
It's like I'm screaming and she's not listening.
I'm trying...
I'm trying...

March 30
I don't think I'll ever get over her...
I don't think I'll ever forget
I, I... I just don't know.
Something... hurts
©2009 ~Gatriel
:icongatriel:

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Part of a huge series, the words/emotions if you guys can see/feel the emotions are true, some details have been changed but most of it are real. I don't know why, but one day I decided to just remember what it felt like and what I was thinking while going through the whole mess. I've had this whole series sitting for quite a while and I was deciding whether to submit it or not. Criticisms are appreciated.

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:iconthe-feaithil-clan:
My sympathies and empathies (I know it's not a word written like that) as well.

You're brave.
Good job. *pats you on the back*
:icongatriel:
any advanced critique? and it's good to see you're really active (compared to other times of course). Thanks bro

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Saanka
:iconthe-feaithil-clan:
I dunno if I can critique this...
Since it's more like a rhyming journal, rather than a poem.
I dunno....maybe that comment was a critique in itself?

Yes, I'm more active now since this shared account is a lot less stressful in the upkeep.
Also cause I've got time to waste, but I'm starting school next week, so things will probably die down (though I could be wrong, not unusual for me lol )

And you're very welcome.
I like your stuff, hence why I keep yakking on about it. :P

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